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Post by zoe on Jun 28, 2011 2:11:20 GMT -5
Imo, it has too much repetition of their names and too much dialog tagging. For example: "Leboda kept up his heavy stride. “I’ve healed from my surgeries.”
Leboda felt sorry for Catfish: the guy couldn‘t think straight for more than two minutes.
Leboda stopped. So did Catfish."I would like it better: "Leboda kept up his heavy stride. “I’ve healed from my surgeries.” He felt sorry for Catfish; the guy couldn‘t think straight for more than two minutes. They stopped." But of course it's just a personal opinion. I'm not professional in any way. Not yet
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Post by zoe on Jun 28, 2011 1:48:41 GMT -5
I like your style and your way with words, but com'on, it's an excerpt, not SMS. It's crying for punctuation and some paragraph breaks.
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Post by zoe on Jun 28, 2011 1:44:11 GMT -5
Agree with Amy, it feels like you are holding back
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Post by zoe on Jun 28, 2011 1:42:33 GMT -5
Hey, not fair! It's longer than on the other forum (thought you can get away with it? Well, you don't, young lady cos I've read the whole damn thing anew ) As you know, I love it. Do you have more of it by now?
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Post by zoe on Jun 28, 2011 1:34:15 GMT -5
Not a rhetorical question, as I'm really asking for the advice and not offering one I liked what I've read on the Smashwords, but I remember reading somewhere that, even if publishing through the Smashwords, the writer would do better going to Kindle separately. I'm so new to this e-pubbing world Any advice would be greatly appreciated!
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Post by zoe on Jun 28, 2011 1:27:05 GMT -5
Lily, thank you so much for the link! I wasn't on AW for ages. I really want to thank you - this forum was created at a perfect timing for me at Smashwords he recommends not to use any page breaks at all. As you said I had to get read of all the numbers and headers and footers and what not (up to a few days back I didn't know those terms were existed at all, lol). I guess I would better open a separate thread
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Post by zoe on Jun 27, 2011 0:20:56 GMT -5
Lily, thank you for a mine of valuable information! <more please > I've battled this formatting issue for a few days and I think I got a handle of it, lol. The Smashwords offers a formatting style guide, which is so detailed, even... hmm... a non-technical type like me could handle
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Post by zoe on Jun 27, 2011 0:09:08 GMT -5
Thank you, Avery
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Post by zoe on Jun 26, 2011 0:54:53 GMT -5
lol yep, but it's just a beginning and this forum looks promising
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Post by zoe on Jun 26, 2011 0:43:03 GMT -5
Agree! These days I can't read a book without seeing all the slips from these or that rules in each paragraph (where are the times I could just read and enjoy? lol)
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Post by zoe on Jun 26, 2011 0:36:03 GMT -5
Lily, thank you for this link and for the ISBN info as well!
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Post by zoe on Jun 26, 2011 0:23:57 GMT -5
I'm seriously toying with the idea of e-pubbing. It sounds like a future of the industry anyway, and I'm not sure I should go on fighting for an agent, to break through in a few years, just to discover the printed books are getting outdated. I guess in this current state of mind I need more threads like that;)
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Post by zoe on Jun 26, 2011 0:16:53 GMT -5
Thank you for the invitation (that came through Amy) Glad to see so many WN faces around
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