tywinters
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Post by tywinters on Jan 26, 2012 8:39:12 GMT -5
This is the opening paragraph. Would you want to read more.
First came the phone call from a stranger, then a letter was hand delivered by a messenger. Barry checked the date. It was post marked twelve years ago. He realized that he'd made a mistake and, would end up risking his life to correct it.
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Lily
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Post by Lily on Jan 26, 2012 12:27:22 GMT -5
Intriguing! Yes, I'd definitely want to read on. And welcome to the forum, Ty, it's great to have you here.
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Post by joshuachrisstoff on Jan 30, 2012 12:00:39 GMT -5
You would get me to the next line, sure.
With any crit, I like Genre, Age group and any warnings about content. Language, rampant sex, child or animal abuse, blood thirsty [that is one of my favourites], military, mysterym who dunnit.
Plus usually a min of 1k words, maybe 2k words. That allows us o see what you are doing, how and where you seem to be going. Please give us more to work with.
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Post by isurvived on May 22, 2012 9:58:01 GMT -5
Yes, That sentence would hook me enough to at least read the 1st page but like Joshua said I'd like to see more.
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Post by bubblegum91 on May 23, 2012 5:35:51 GMT -5
I'd certainly read on. As others have said, a little bit more would have been fantastic to see.
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cher311
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Post by cher311 on Aug 30, 2012 10:29:30 GMT -5
And a big YES from me. I would definitely read more.
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Richard
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Post by Richard on Aug 30, 2012 11:19:03 GMT -5
And a big YES from me. I would definitely read more. Ty hasn't posted since Jan. You may have to wait a while  |
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Post by Christie Bremmer on Jan 18, 2013 14:42:57 GMT -5
Good point B.
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william
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Post by william on Jun 21, 2013 8:26:20 GMT -5
No.
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