Scene needs some help. Please.

[bubblegum91]

I like the story, a few things.
When Trinity is beating up David, it's a little unclear where they are. One second they are in the car and then they are suddenly outside.
When Trinity is transforming, give more information. Does her hair change? Does her eyes? Does her skin? Or her bones? Up to you what you wish to include.
Keep polishing, this has good potential.

[BlueLotus]

Ah thanks Bubblegum. I will have to look at that
Hugs.
~BL~

Bubblegum, you asked how they got from the car to outside.
I wrote that Trin had grabbed his hair and pulled him out.

Also you asked about how she looks when she "transforms"

"She seemed to grow taller, more muscular,deadlier."

Is that not enough detail? I can re work it just wondering if you missed these parts?

[bubblegum91]

Woops sorry. I have a tendency not to pay full attention sometimes. But yes, the detail seems a little bit awkward, to me at least. Not that I could write it better.

Maybe include a little bit more detail in what she looks like. She appears more muscular, that's good but what does she look like. It needn't be exact just a little bit more than muscular. Unless, you wanted the reader to imagine themselves, in which case ignore me.
Good luck.

[BlueLotus]

Thanks, I will see what i can do with it.