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Post by influential on Aug 7, 2011 18:16:22 GMT -5
I sold these lyrics but please give me some feedback anyway.
You cried while time passed couldn’t feel better Bitter; “why me?” you asked I had no answers Put my hand on your shoulder You shuttered away Its like you rolled a boulder Right between us
Your hiding away from the world With such ridicule and suffering You’re a gun without a bullet With the days apart; no heart Feeling violated every single day that’s what days apart begin with
Barricading yourself away Feeling terrible Damn, yet another bad day Drained energy don’t want to be bothered What now? Think everything is awkward Mocking this life
Your hiding away from the world With such ridicule and suffering You’re a gun without a bullet With the days apart; no heart Feeling violated every single day that’s what days apart begin with
Feeling like you are worthless Amount to nothing People continue to push and press Not understanding The situation is beyond knowledge But its killing you On the inside like you are garbage Crying all night
Your hiding away from the world With such ridicule and suffering You’re a gun without a bullet With the days apart; no heart Feeling violated every single day that’s what days apart begin with
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Post by waterpoor on Aug 9, 2011 13:53:12 GMT -5
The only critique to a piece that sold---Get more money next time! Congrats R.
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kelly
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Post by kelly on Aug 9, 2011 15:16:47 GMT -5
Yeah I second that.
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Post by influential on Aug 9, 2011 16:55:05 GMT -5
ok, thanks guys!
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