Disclosure

[Richard]

He once told me of a life
He didn’t have
He couldn’t have

I was blinded I didn’t see
The way it was
I should’ve known

As I sit here wondering
A mystery
Or so it seems

Made my way like I wanted to
I played the fool
Broke all the rules

Lost my grip on reality
It seemed so clear
But never near

Illusions fade with the light of day
A discerning look
Was all it took

Gather the pieces to be the man
I could’ve been
I should’ve been

A heavier weight I couldn’t bear
If I’d’ve known
I might have grown

A steady pace I’m leading now
If only then
I’m not condemned

[influential]

I liked this. But I got a suggestion for you. I noticed the first stanza didnt rhyme but the rest did. if your gonna make all the rest of the stanzas rhyme, make sure the first one rhymes aswell. I also liked how this came straight from the heart too, those are the best poems, in my opinion. well written and some techniques used wisely. I don't think it could have been written any better at all, brilliant piece. keep it up.

[Richard]

Appreciate it Influential.

[waterpoor]

Richard, I really like this one. I spend a lot of time working with people in recovery. This is a good recovery piece.
R.