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Post by martinshaw on Jul 8, 2011 2:44:40 GMT -5
Mine are just gonna get worse and worse... Join in!
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Post by martinshaw on Jul 8, 2011 4:30:57 GMT -5
Decompression
No girl ever looks twice anymore, as I waste away in my van trundling to work, with my pickling liver and Yogi Bear eyes. I plod each day like a Sasquatch with a sore head
Some say I should slow down, but I was born to run, Springsteen forever in my mind as Clarence serenades, his sax a seedy low key in each of my night time stupors.
I have to get out, and get out I will in one way or another? I choose the death of a thousand cuts, my life whittled from drugs and alcohol, and a heart that’s scarred by the turning away of loved ones.
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Post by amylou on Jul 8, 2011 5:43:25 GMT -5
I actually think this is really good, but I like poems that reflect feelings/emotions. The descriptions make me feel so many things. I get a true sense of how he views himself and what's going on inside his heart and mind.
And I would look twice!
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Post by martinshaw on Jul 8, 2011 15:27:43 GMT -5
You make me crash
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Lily
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Post by Lily on Jul 8, 2011 16:42:26 GMT -5
It's very good, Martin. And that's because -- as all the best poetry -- it comes from the heart. Oh and I would look twice, also. ;-)
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Post by amylou on Jul 8, 2011 19:30:02 GMT -5
See Martin, that makes two of us who would look twice
Okay, here is my poem/prose for day two, it's the best I can do.....
Water Falls
Life giving waters evaporate spill out stealing breath from the one I covet. Hope expires along with a legacy. Threads of love woven together unravel to nothing that matters to anyone except for me.
I'm betrayed by this temple that rejects the heart beating within. I'm forsaken by a God that steals this gift because He can.
Will my arms brake from never holding you? Yes. Will my heart ache from never nurturing you? Yes. No one will take your place. There isn't another like you.
But I will find my masterpiece again. I will hold you tight so you won't slip away. Capture you some way and love you eternally unconditionally, because you belong to me.
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Post by martinshaw on Jul 9, 2011 3:27:12 GMT -5
Thanks Lils. I was on a high lol... hey the sites cracking on girl. Well done
Amy,.
There is so much improvement with your work you are becoming a blur. Good stuff again. I'll need to watch my back, ha ha
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Post by amylou on Jul 9, 2011 6:36:41 GMT -5
wow, thanks martin - i've had some help along the way! if you're not careful i will sneak up on you like a ninja!
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