connie
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Post by connie on Dec 24, 2011 10:35:14 GMT -5
wow BL, great imagery here! It took me a bit to understand what was happening- and I'm not to good at fantasy. But your descriptions sustain the piece. Good writing, wish I could do it too.
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Post by bubblegum91 on Dec 24, 2011 21:18:02 GMT -5
Good job BL! Also, Kali reference yay! I always liked Kali, didn't take flack from no one, kind gentle and nurturing and she liked to dance haha!
Apart from a few little grammatical errors, I think this is an interesting story. Obviously heavily influenced by Hindu beliefs, which I do find intriguing at times, despite my lack of religious conviction. I do hope you add a little bit of every religion, for Hinduism teaches that all religions are a pathway to the One True God.
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BlueLotus
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Post by BlueLotus on Dec 28, 2011 1:10:53 GMT -5
I plan to include a lot of religious mythology. The girl Moksha is talking to is a devout Buddhist in fact! I like myths  I actually have updated this chapter quite a bit. If you want to read the newest draft PM me your email. I don't want to post it since it is so close to final I can smell it. |
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Post by bubblegum91 on Dec 28, 2011 22:36:50 GMT -5
That's great! I shall, in fact, pm you. Look forward to reading it (after I devour Wuthering Heights, in an attempt to translate it to my younger cousin studying it. )
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BlueLotus
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Post by BlueLotus on Dec 29, 2011 15:22:19 GMT -5
Luck with that!!! Email sent no rush when ever you get round to it dear. |
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Post by bubblegum91 on Dec 29, 2011 21:40:17 GMT -5
Cool, thanks!
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