Post by tar111 on Aug 20, 2011 8:53:52 GMT -5
Here is my attempt at a query for my first novel. Please be as harsh as you need to when reviewing it. I would love to correct my errors.
Dear Agent,
Thirteen teenagers are about to be thrust into a wilderness situation that will test them, to the brink, on their ability to cooperate and form a functional society. My novel, Vulgarian Rhapsody, is a 66,000 word completed work that serves as a depiction of life in a fictional town in modern-day Pennsylvania following a hostile government overthrow. The book is literary fiction geared toward a young adult audience and weaves in morals with humor and eventual actualization for its troubled characters. For all of its allegory and allusion it could be accurately dubbed, “The Thinking Man’s Novel.”
Outspoken and clever, Jefferson Fink is one of thirteen teenagers forced into the backwoods by outstanding circumstances (think Holden Caulfield meets Lord of the Flies). His despondency toward The Man and Poseurs and the teens struggle to maintain order develop into quite the conundrum when secret gold and knowledge arrive on the scene and cause a slew of their best and worst traits to emerge. Eventually, their woodland society develops into a microcosm of 21st Century America as the struggle between moral decadence and upstanding citizenship ensues. All the while, Jefferson is seeking revenge for a long time friend and success in his courting of the lovely Melissa Betrayal, valor, and shrewdness abound as the thirteen search for a meaning behind their existence and how they came together as a whole.
I do have a few publishing credentials to my name and am actively seeking publication for a slew of works in progress. However, I have engaged in two publishing endeavors in the past, one being the publication of my poem "Salaamata" in the Pittsburgh Post-Gazette and the other being the tale of my great grandfather’s efforts in World War I in Hampton Veterans Remember. Thank you for taking the time to read this, I would appreciate a response if you are interested.
Sincerely,
Dear Agent,
Thirteen teenagers are about to be thrust into a wilderness situation that will test them, to the brink, on their ability to cooperate and form a functional society. My novel, Vulgarian Rhapsody, is a 66,000 word completed work that serves as a depiction of life in a fictional town in modern-day Pennsylvania following a hostile government overthrow. The book is literary fiction geared toward a young adult audience and weaves in morals with humor and eventual actualization for its troubled characters. For all of its allegory and allusion it could be accurately dubbed, “The Thinking Man’s Novel.”
Outspoken and clever, Jefferson Fink is one of thirteen teenagers forced into the backwoods by outstanding circumstances (think Holden Caulfield meets Lord of the Flies). His despondency toward The Man and Poseurs and the teens struggle to maintain order develop into quite the conundrum when secret gold and knowledge arrive on the scene and cause a slew of their best and worst traits to emerge. Eventually, their woodland society develops into a microcosm of 21st Century America as the struggle between moral decadence and upstanding citizenship ensues. All the while, Jefferson is seeking revenge for a long time friend and success in his courting of the lovely Melissa Betrayal, valor, and shrewdness abound as the thirteen search for a meaning behind their existence and how they came together as a whole.
I do have a few publishing credentials to my name and am actively seeking publication for a slew of works in progress. However, I have engaged in two publishing endeavors in the past, one being the publication of my poem "Salaamata" in the Pittsburgh Post-Gazette and the other being the tale of my great grandfather’s efforts in World War I in Hampton Veterans Remember. Thank you for taking the time to read this, I would appreciate a response if you are interested.
Sincerely,