xenalin
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Post by xenalin on Aug 17, 2011 3:37:20 GMT -5
So .. I haven't written anything good in years, but I wrote this a while ago and was wondering if you guys think it's worth continuing on. I don't know where to go with it though or if this is everything that can come out of it. Please excuse any poor language, spelling or grammar. English is not my first language.
Sleep. Sleep was good. Sleep was nice. Yet sleep was something of a luxury for her. She was an insomniac. Had been for years. She was exhausted but still she couldn’t go to sleep. If she did, the dreams would come back. She hated the dreams. They were mostly what made her an insomniac. The biggest part however was that if she went to sleep, eventually she had to wake up and realise it wasn’t a dream anymore. Her family would still be alive. Husband, kids, parents, siblings. Everyone would still be alive if she never went to sleep. She was sure of it. It was all just a dream. One bad dream but still a dream. Though she hadn’t seen any of them for years now. Maybe they all were out of town, or being held somewhere against their will. She had to find them.
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BlueLotus
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Post by BlueLotus on Aug 17, 2011 3:41:58 GMT -5
redundancy aside... I would follow it and see where it ends up, if done right it could be a rather interesting psychological thriller???
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Richard
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Post by Richard on Aug 17, 2011 10:16:34 GMT -5
Xenalin, your writing style is engaging and flows very nicely.
Keep going.
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Post by waterpoor on Aug 17, 2011 20:49:48 GMT -5
xenalin, I also like your writing style. There's not much there, maybe just your own setup for a story. One of my favorite parts of writing a story or novel is following the characters to see where they go and what they do. This person seems worth following out of bed. R.
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