Post by joshuachrisstoff on Nov 25, 2013 16:00:09 GMT -5
Gidday one and all.
I don't want to stir up racial hatred but if it already exists let's use it and take the piss out of it even if just a little
I need an American writing partner.
I write US based spec ops. At the beginning of this new work, I am the MC who generally lives around North Carolina. I have him randomly in New York. This is all very fluid and purely negotiable with everything else. Any and all of what has happened so far could be swapped about or even not exist in the final draft.
MC is window shopping, this may stay or go, it is a set up device. He sees an advert in a realtor's window in Manhattan for a derelict building in W127th St in Harlem. No alarm bells yet.
Grabs a cab, goes to Harlem, gets out of the cab, gets no change as the driver flees in terror.
MC has bulk cash, the results of knocking over a coupla drug cartels in previous official ops. It doesn't matter how or where he invests his cash, there is simply too much to ever lose any significant amount of it.
For no good reason something about the look of this derelict building appealed to him and with that sole consideration he looks like he is going to buy this one, maybe one or two others attached to it. Then he will renovate it and turn it into accommodation, shopping, education or whatever else might benefit the community.
WHERE DO YOU FIT IN??
Okay, MC is out of the cab, the cab is gone, now he is crossing the road to get a better view of the whole of the building in case that will help him decide to buy it or not.
To my limited knowledge, Harlem was a borough that was essentially a Black People only neighborhood. No white people or others allowed. Is that still valid?
Assuming that Harlem is still a bit rough around the edges then some casual conflict here between black and white should be 'normal' maybe?.
If this is no longer valid, as in Harlem is no longer the ghetto it used to be, is there another NY or Manhattan suburb that is all one race and they basically rule the streets and scare away anyone not of their own kind?
I am not making a morale judgment here, not at all, just want to have some fun, some action that is valid and as close to daily life as is possible to get.
YOU
Will need to be 100% the black character, saying the words he says, dishing up some abusive comments trying to stir up the ire of the MC. That happens to be impossible because of how I have set up this MC but then the aggressor won’t know that. Water off a ducks back so to say.
Now another half of your job is to give me the words that the MC will use, maybe placating, or maybe even stirring them up. YOU will have to keep my slang in keeping with what locals or Now Yorker's use.
Ultimately the encounter will end up in a fistfight. The MC is a perfect fighter in H2H combat so much like Jet Li, Bruce Lee, Jean Claude Van Damme, or Chuck Norris on their very best days. So there will be no question that he will win the fight no matter how long it goes on for, just five minutes max, and I am just thinking that he will connect with these guys and they will sit down and have a soda with each other afterwards.
I am not trying to ‘create’ a racial rift where one doesn’t exist but since their used to be one, if it is still there, I want to use it for a semi noble purpose.
Can you be my 1.5 local Harlem characters so I can get it as close to reality as it is possible to achieve?
Yes, the fight doesn’t need to happen, let’s just say that it is the boys letting off some steam, after five minutes of throwing punches one sides runs out of steam and they eventually sit down together and smile a lot. Maybe then the MC tells them that he is army and this is exactly what they do in training, daily, more or less. In spire them a little bit. Also, it doesn’t need to be white vs black, it could be Latino or any other ethnic group that is handy down there. You might want to be careful, or even use this, the MC now speaks basic Russian, German, French, Hindi, Hokkien, Mandarin, Cantonese, now that is not extensively but he can earwig on anyone else having a casual conversation, so just watch that when you find groups to conflict with.
Now I just picked Black and Harlem since from about the fifties they have owned the Harlem streets and community simply with numbers. I don’t want to perpetuate a myth that is no longer valid or to cause trouble where it has been resolved, so it will be up to you to keep me on the straight and narrow. I am thinking there may not be a lot of dialog when two or more people are scrapping in the street. What do you say? Can you give me a few days so we can hammer out some real conflict in words and bloody noses to get my new action and adventure story underway?
Your call, in or out?
Heemail Joshua Christoff AT mail. DOT com
I don't want to stir up racial hatred but if it already exists let's use it and take the piss out of it even if just a little
I need an American writing partner.
I write US based spec ops. At the beginning of this new work, I am the MC who generally lives around North Carolina. I have him randomly in New York. This is all very fluid and purely negotiable with everything else. Any and all of what has happened so far could be swapped about or even not exist in the final draft.
MC is window shopping, this may stay or go, it is a set up device. He sees an advert in a realtor's window in Manhattan for a derelict building in W127th St in Harlem. No alarm bells yet.
Grabs a cab, goes to Harlem, gets out of the cab, gets no change as the driver flees in terror.
MC has bulk cash, the results of knocking over a coupla drug cartels in previous official ops. It doesn't matter how or where he invests his cash, there is simply too much to ever lose any significant amount of it.
For no good reason something about the look of this derelict building appealed to him and with that sole consideration he looks like he is going to buy this one, maybe one or two others attached to it. Then he will renovate it and turn it into accommodation, shopping, education or whatever else might benefit the community.
WHERE DO YOU FIT IN??
Okay, MC is out of the cab, the cab is gone, now he is crossing the road to get a better view of the whole of the building in case that will help him decide to buy it or not.
To my limited knowledge, Harlem was a borough that was essentially a Black People only neighborhood. No white people or others allowed. Is that still valid?
Assuming that Harlem is still a bit rough around the edges then some casual conflict here between black and white should be 'normal' maybe?.
If this is no longer valid, as in Harlem is no longer the ghetto it used to be, is there another NY or Manhattan suburb that is all one race and they basically rule the streets and scare away anyone not of their own kind?
I am not making a morale judgment here, not at all, just want to have some fun, some action that is valid and as close to daily life as is possible to get.
YOU
Will need to be 100% the black character, saying the words he says, dishing up some abusive comments trying to stir up the ire of the MC. That happens to be impossible because of how I have set up this MC but then the aggressor won’t know that. Water off a ducks back so to say.
Now another half of your job is to give me the words that the MC will use, maybe placating, or maybe even stirring them up. YOU will have to keep my slang in keeping with what locals or Now Yorker's use.
Ultimately the encounter will end up in a fistfight. The MC is a perfect fighter in H2H combat so much like Jet Li, Bruce Lee, Jean Claude Van Damme, or Chuck Norris on their very best days. So there will be no question that he will win the fight no matter how long it goes on for, just five minutes max, and I am just thinking that he will connect with these guys and they will sit down and have a soda with each other afterwards.
I am not trying to ‘create’ a racial rift where one doesn’t exist but since their used to be one, if it is still there, I want to use it for a semi noble purpose.
Can you be my 1.5 local Harlem characters so I can get it as close to reality as it is possible to achieve?
Yes, the fight doesn’t need to happen, let’s just say that it is the boys letting off some steam, after five minutes of throwing punches one sides runs out of steam and they eventually sit down together and smile a lot. Maybe then the MC tells them that he is army and this is exactly what they do in training, daily, more or less. In spire them a little bit. Also, it doesn’t need to be white vs black, it could be Latino or any other ethnic group that is handy down there. You might want to be careful, or even use this, the MC now speaks basic Russian, German, French, Hindi, Hokkien, Mandarin, Cantonese, now that is not extensively but he can earwig on anyone else having a casual conversation, so just watch that when you find groups to conflict with.
Now I just picked Black and Harlem since from about the fifties they have owned the Harlem streets and community simply with numbers. I don’t want to perpetuate a myth that is no longer valid or to cause trouble where it has been resolved, so it will be up to you to keep me on the straight and narrow. I am thinking there may not be a lot of dialog when two or more people are scrapping in the street. What do you say? Can you give me a few days so we can hammer out some real conflict in words and bloody noses to get my new action and adventure story underway?
Your call, in or out?
Heemail Joshua Christoff AT mail. DOT com